Old Farm House – A Pantoum – Thursday Doors Writing Challenge

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Image credit: © Katy TrailCreations

But, the old farmhouse had good bones

its thirsty grasses had long shed green,

nearby trees sympathized in autumn browns,

time dug sinewed paths instead of hewn lawn.

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Its thirsty grasses had long shed green,

The roof was sturdy the doors not pristine

Time dug sinewed paths instead of hewn lawn

Its trusses a backbone of frontier life sown.

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The roof was sturdy the doors not pristine

nearby trees sympathized in autumn browns.

Its trusses a backbone of frontier life sown

but, the old farmhouse had good bones!

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Dan Antion’s TDWC, ThursdayDoors Annual Writing Challenge. Image credit: Katy TrailCreations.

A Pantoum is a 15th century Malaysian verse form later popularized by French poets. It is a series of four line verses where the second and fourth lines -starting with the first verse – are repeated as the first and third lines of the following verse.

In the last verse, the poem’s first line is repeated as the last line of the poem, and the first verse’s third line is repeated as the second line of the final verse.

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42 thoughts on “Old Farm House – A Pantoum – Thursday Doors Writing Challenge”

  4. Suzette, to me, the line “the old farmhouse had good bones” carries a calm strength that feels reassuring to me. The interplay of time and nature throughout the poem creates a sense of enduring life beneath the fading colors.

    Much love,
    David

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  6. What an utter blessing it is to come through the years with sinewed, strong bones.
    This is such a beautiful—and delightfully crafted—poem, gently waltzing in its abab rhyme.
    Katy Trail Creations has offered you the perfect backbone and muse.

    Truly, such beautiful ramblings.

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    1. It was Katy TrailCreations that inspired the meditation. The distance of the house from the roadway/entrance spoke to me on many levels of what seems far is closer to the sense and for lack of a better word, the framework of the past to undergird the present closeness of the now of what one is becoming
      I love the word ramblings…Perfect.
      Have a wonderful day in bliss and Peace’s anointing.

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      1. Yes, you chose so well—and I’m in awe of how you introduced yourself to the muse. The word but carries such weight in this context, opening a doorway to the profound meditation that followed.

        Your way of seeing how the old farmhouse has maintained its structure through the years truly moved me. You made such a beautiful observation: that what feels far can, through reflection, feel suddenly closer.

        I believe I grasped your perspective on the present—how hope lingers in the possibility that the grass will be kept and may grow greener. Still, the farmhouse remains. It is still there, grounded and centered.

        I’m so glad you appreciated the word ramblings—it felt right for the rhythm and intimacy of your piece.

        Wishing you a wonderful day too. Thank you. Pure bliss and peace to you too.

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      2. Yes!! The resilience and even persistence of the farmhouse I feel, to remain steadfast there when all about it has faded (greens muted..etc)…is a sort of reflection of hope as you stated so well here.

        Thank you for your generous blessings of peace. I delight!

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  8. I like this form, Suzette and I like the lines you chose. This flows very well, and it all works with that photo. I think “good bones” fits that house very nicely.

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