
Version A
Ocean crown jewels; magic afloat in coral
Where mere sand is turned to pearls –
Nature’s alchemy hides fortune’s token
In famous pearls like Beauty of Ocean.
Waves sway in the sea’s charm bracelet
Swelling as their currents spin amulets.
Version B
Ocean crown jewels;
The sound of the waves
Summons all the brave,
To traverse new lands,
To imagine new shores,
To safeguard its treasures:
Priceless pearls of water,
Heirlooms of life’s aquifer.
The two versions dance before me as distinctly different stages of life
Considering both, for me it feels safe to say I’m at stage A.
Standing on the shore gazing into the majestic beauty you describe, into magnificence of life, loving the ripples that gently come and ornate my toes, thankful to life, for life.
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Amen! A beautiful vision of Version A and spot on discernment of its subtle impressions. You have deep insight..wow. Well said. Thank you. Blessings on your day. Cheers โค
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Wishing you a glorious Sunday too Suzetteโค, Thank you for your appreciation and thank you for sharing your intimate appreciation of life through these beautiful two tales of life.
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My pleasure๐
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I think I prefer the second version though I’m not sure why, the first has some lovely images.
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Thank you Jane. Yes you are right on both points. Each version has a different “feel”. I am glad they offered some food for thought. Many blessings on your day. โค๐
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Thanks, Suzette, and you too ๐
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Great writing Suzette
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Thank you Sadje. I appreciate your support greatly. Cheers โค
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Youโre welcome ๐
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Suzette, I enjoyed the contrast of both versions. I feel drawn to โBโ as I feel like an adventurer. After all, this is a perfect description of a writer.
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Your discernment is amazing. You are spot on in your impressions of the second piece! I agree – the writer mounts many adventures for all to enjoy. Thank you for your support and wise comments. Always a pleasure to hear from you. Blessings on your day. Peace
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Both versions were penned perfectly but I got swept away with the 2nd one. Nice Suzette and happy Sunday โค๏ธ Cindy
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Hello Cindy Happy Sunday to you also. I loved your expression …”got swept away with the 2nd one” So lovely to hear, thank you for your lovely comments. Blessings and peace to you.๐๐
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And to you Dear Suzette!
I’m so glad you enjoyed my comment. Blesssings and peace back to you! โค๏ธ๐ค
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You are so talented. I loved the first poem but then when I read the second, I loved it even more than the first. I’m not poetic at all and I’m always amazed at your writing.
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Aww..you are most kind. Thank you
I admire what you do. Your travels and powerful writing about them is stunning. Thank you!!
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I like both versions very much, Suzette. ๐ It feels like a comparison to me of when a) life happens to us and b) what we do in our lives.
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Very well said Susi. I am happy that you found food for thought in them both. Thank you! Blessings on your day. Cheers ๐
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You’re welcome! ๐
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They both are crown jewels.
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You are most kind. So glad you enjoyed them. Blessings to you. Peace ๐๐
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Two very different versions! I prefer the first one. The longer lines seem more reminiscent of the motion of the waves.
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Ah lovely, I am glad you like it Liz. Always a pleasure to hear your insights. Have a great week. Peace.
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Thank you, Suzette. I hope you have a great week as well.
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Thank you Liz
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You’re welcome, Suzette.
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